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Last Wednesday you flew from London to Vancouver. When you arrived home, you discovered that you had left your hand luggage on the plane. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter, you should explain: where and when you lost your bag what your bag looks like what its contents were

Dear Sir, I would like to report lost property. It seems that I left my hand luggage on one of your flights
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 after reaching home.
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 Wednesday, I took the flight at 10:00 PM
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 as I correctly remember, I put it in the bin above my seat 32C. All the way through the flight
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had not taken it out from there. My bag is black in colour with the brand name "TCS" embroidered on it. It is medium-sized and is locked with a lock. At the time of checking, the security personnel weighed it as 7 kilograms. More importantly, my handbag contains my office laptop and identification card
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 you can use to establish my identity.
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, the side pocket on the outside has a blue water bottle. Please let me know if you have my hand luggage and how I can get it back. I am looking forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Rubina Gill

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grammar
Some sentences are long and awkward. Use short, clear lines.
conventions
State the date clearly. Avoid 'This Wednesday' to prevent confusion.
organization
Put the facts in a clear order: where/when the bag was left, bag look, contents, and what you want.
content
Be precise about key items (laptop, ID) and avoid extra detail.
content
The letter says what happened and asks for help.
tone
The tone is mostly formal and respectful.
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