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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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At the current time, the majority of people prefer working for themselves rather than working for someone or with collective. The main reason would be working independently. There are valid advantages and
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 disadvantages in
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 issue which I will now consider. On the one hand, some people think that many works
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an organization
 or government demand special rules and regulations.
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, people who
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 in an organization would be bound by the rules and regulations of the company and
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 their boss would dictate tons of
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 to them. Another reason can be a desire for a more money. Many organizations can not give high salary to their employees.
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, workers choose to be a freelancer which is more beneficial than being an employee.
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, some people feel that being a self-employed would demand more skills and energy. In the
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, people who run their own business have some problems and pressures in that time, he /she should solve that those problems on their own without any employee.
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, any self-employed persons would more easily skip deadlines.
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, it might be said that self employed or entrepreneur often requires a considerable amount of money at the beginning.
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 is a complicated issue among the many youngsters because they would not have much accumulated before they get a job. Fore example, my close friend had an incredible plan, but he could not start it due to lack of money. In conclusion,
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 working self-employed has some problems and many choose
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 as a self-employed it would be more beneficial their
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 as well as their personal life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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