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Some people say that children should stay in school until the age of 18. Others suggest that educating children untill the age of 14 is enough.

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According to some people children should studying at
school
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 till 18
age
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. But in
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 time, other parents think that for children will be enough stay in
school
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 until 14
age
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. I agree with
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 both views, but in my opinion the
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 view correctly. Because, children in them life should do more experiments and learn
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 them mistakes. If
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the child
a child
 would study by 18
age
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, he or she can lose
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an important part
important parts
 of them times in their life. On the one hand, In Developed and developing world each person goes to
school
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 and take a lot of interesting
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facts
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 world. The
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study
 in
school
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 the perfect time for each
child
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 in
mi
of me or myself
my
 view. With
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, children nowadays go to
school
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 until 16
age
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. But more parents want that their children go to
school
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 till 18
age
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. As result in will mines that they are would
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study
studied
 till them adulthood. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is not right. Because children should change
them
of them or themselves
their
 lifestyle so far how
it
it is
it's
 possible in my view. With
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child
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 can be open them close talents and horizons.
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, how show for us statistic forms children can learn all
school
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 program in the 8 year. With
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 we can understand that for
child
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 to enough studying at
school
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 only by 14
age
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.
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, after
school
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child
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 can change them location about studying in my opinion.
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Also children
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Also, children
 till 14
age
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 can choice the special direction about
them
of them or themselves
their
 dream job. And go to the them way after finishing
them
of them or themselves
their
school
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. I think it is would be great, because each person should choice them way and go. To conclude, the stay in
school
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 till 14
age
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 benefit than till 18
age
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. Because after 14
age
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child
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children
 can choice with
which they want work
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which they want to work
.
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, they can full open themselves horizons and talents.
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 know more and more person should change
them
of them or themselves
their
 location and position in life.
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