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Far too little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out. Why do people do so little about it? How can the problem be solved.

#animals #plants #people
nowadays most
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Nowadays, most
Nowadays most
 of the plants and animals are
in
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on
 the verge of extinction, due to natural as well as man-made disasters. Still, the people are not making any effort to improve the situation. The main reason is the unawareness of the importance of
ecosystem
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ecosystems
the ecosystem
 and the problem can only be solved by giving proper education and implementing strict laws. The essay is going to
discusses
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discuss
 about the reasons as well as solutions for
this
 issue. Human
are not doing
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is not doing
 anything to protect the lives on the earth, is mainly due to the unawareness how interdependently
this
 ecosystem works.
they
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They
are in a believe
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believe in a
are in a believed
are in a believe
 that without the coexistence of other creatures they can survive in
this
 world.
they
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They
 are using the flora and fauna for their needs recklessly.
For example
, cutting of forest for their luxurious life makes an imbalance in the environment, by increasing the temperature in the atmosphere causes different natural calamities like flooding. Apart from that they kill the animals for food, clothes or to conduct several scientific studies. These all activities directly affect the stability of the food chain. Above mentioned problems can be tackled through thorough education, starting from the primary school about the importance of protecting the nature.
several
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Several
 awareness
program
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programs
 should be conducted world-wide to alert the aftereffects of destroying the flora and fauna.
government
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Government
 has to adopt stringent laws against poaching and deforestation.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
, they must monitor whether the laws are implementing or not.
to
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To
 conclude, unawareness about the importance of protecting the plants and animals make the human to act little, whereas proper teaching from the childhood and implement strict laws can solve
this
 issue to a great extend.
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