In some societies the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment. To what extent do you agree?

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The number of crimes committed by teenagers has increased all over the

world needless

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world, needless

to say the level of them.

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controversy has been a

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an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centre

of attention in

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the media

and the public have shown their

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interest

. Even though there are still societal responsibilities to prevent those crimes from happening in the

first

place, I strongly believe the necessary amendment should be made with top priority for teens to receive adult punishments. It has been true schools and each parent have some level of responsibility and some improvement must be followed here and there. It is mainly because more than 70 percentage of teenage criminals have gone through violence and bullies and poverty either from schools or their houses growing up according to statistics.

Thus

, the opinion makes a sense of itself that many crimes would have not happened in the

first

place if some needed actions and measures by those institutions and monitoring with care and love had been.

However

, I strongly believe it can’t wait until the crimes have decreased any

longer

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length

and time to turn it around. While more investment and societal cares and interests have been made toward teenagers with colour and who grow below

poverty line

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the poverty line

, almost equal level of strong punishment must be given to a teenage criminal to minimize and prevent it from happening in the

first

place with two reasons.

Firstly

, it is known that they find strong punishment more fearful and can actually stop themselves because they already predict horrible consequences of what they will do.

Secondly

, it should be taken lightly most of

victims

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the victims

are teenagers and teenagers are old and have a long enough education experience to make

judgement

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a judgement

judgements

on their

behaviors

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviours

behaviour

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Topic Vocabulary:

juvenile delinquency
criminal behavior
rehabilitation
recidivism
adolescent development
retribution
impulse control
the justice system
societal influences
environmental factors
juvenile justice
punitive measures
adult incarceration
youth crime
reformative programs
deterrence
mitigating circumstances
restorative justice
correctional facilities
peer pressure

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