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Does personality describe the person? To what extent do you agree?

#personality #person
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It is argued that we should understand a
person
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 by looking at their personalities. I agree that personality could partly present who that
person
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 is, but other factors in
life
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 should be considered as well. We use
personality
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personally
 to talk about a
person
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 from different angles. Sometimes we see a
person
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 positively and we say that they are hard working, friendly or active. It can
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 be some more complex description like
empathetic
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empathy
, or sympathetic. People can
also
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 be described in a negative way,
for example
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, we always say some people are selfish as they only think about themselves. Other people may be seeing the world from a negative perspective all the time, we
thus
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 call them a pessimistic
person
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.
On the other hand
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, to know a
person
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 fully cannot only rely on the single
side we
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side, we
 see from their personality, there are several other aspects that should be considered as well.
Firstly
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, the
life
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 experience is very important when we talk about one
person
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.
For example
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, a
person
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 who worked as a doctor may have
better understand
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a better understanding
better understanding
 about
life
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 and death.
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, qualifications can be added to our understanding of a
person
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, as that represents what academic knowledge and skills are they obtained.
Finally
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, we
also
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 care
about whether
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about, whether
 that
person
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 is polite and like sharing or not. The family backgrounds and cultural backgrounds can help us to know a
person
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 better too. In conclusion, we may meet all kinds of people with different personalities.
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, that does not represent who that
person
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 is, we need to know the
person
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 more by considering the other factors,
such
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 as
life
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 experience, qualifications, politeness or their various backgrounds.
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