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Does personality describe the person? To what extent do you agree?

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Personality
 is something which describes nature as well as the thinking of an individual. In today’s contemporary era an individual’s
personality
 makes a
lot
 of difference
for
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in
 surviving.
For instance
, a successful salesperson must have a positive attitude and must be extrovert in order to make good sales in the market.
This
 essay shall delve does
personality
 in real life describe a
person
.
To begin
 with, there is saying that, “a good
personality
 always attracts people.” A
lot
 of people can agree to
this
statement as
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statement, as
 every
person
 on
this
 earth have their own
personality
, attitude, and
way
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a way
 of living its life. Different people
attract
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are attracted
 to
different
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different personalities
a different personality
personality
, but the question arises, how do people know the
personality
 of an individual? The answer is an individual’s
personality
 can be found out by talking to them and understanding them.
However
, individuals who are introvert can be a good thinker, philosopher, writer, etc.
whereas
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Whereas
, the people who are extrovert could become a good leader, teacher.
Nevertheless
, people who are
kind-hearted can
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kind-hearted, can
 never hurt anyone and are always ready to help those in need.
Likewise
, people who have a
lot
 of anger in themselves get frustrated and
angry even
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angry, even
on
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about
 little things in life. To put it in the nutshell, an
individuals
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individual's
individual
personality
 can describe the
person
 and people of same
personality
 usually attracts each other. In general, if a
person
 wants to change
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
perosnality it may
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personality, it may
personality it may
 take a little effort and a
lot
 of hard work.
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