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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology #functions
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Nowadays, technologies have developed in unprecedented pace and gained essential role in so many areas in our lives.
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, I believe,
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 computers and mobiles have several advantages over public libraries, e-books cannot give satisfaction and cannot provide with reliable materials all the time.
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, during reading paper books, readers can undergo the lives and feelings of characters in a book. Books can bring the real, fulfilling and natural experience, the pleasure and contentment, which is hardly achievable through reading e-book.
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 to these positives, readers can retain information longer as paper books allow to make notes and to highlight necessary parts of the text.
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, one important factor is the accessibility of books online and in public free of charge. In spite of wide spread of technologies, there are many suburban areas where people, especially students, struggle to surf the net due to unavailability of
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the internet
. Contradicting to that, public libraries can offer free and daily access and what is more, quit and relaxing place to read books.
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, in terms of veracity paper books have gained the trust of people. As books and magazines are published by professional publishing houses, reliability is guaranteed and being guided by false information is less likely than
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 the internet. In conclusion, I think that public libraries have irreplaceable role and no technology can replace them,
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, we should encourage funding in
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 field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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