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Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The question on whether the modernization in the forms of computer and
internet
 is replacing the libraries which are considered as the wastage of money has always been debatable. There are valid arguments for either side,
however in
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however, in
 my view, the libraries should be available to the public as a useful tool and avenue to study along with computers being an additional source of information. On the one hand, the library is the place where students can focus on their studies and complete their assignments in a quiet environment with the study material available in the house, and
thus
, no need to go online and worry about the
internet
 fee.
Additionally
, there are several research articles, manuscripts, journals and ancient books which cannot be found online,
however can
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however, can
 be easily accessed through the libraries and even get them issued for the study at home options.
On the other hand
, the trend of ebooks is on the rise due to the widespread usage of computers and
internet
 due to their easy accessibility, portability, easy to use and storage options. Due to the ubiquitous nature of
internet
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the internet
, they can be downloaded at any time within a fraction of seconds by any number of users at a no or a fee.
Additionally
, the computers are considered more Eco-friendly due to the minimal use of papers required for printing books for the libraries.
However
, their prolonged use under the bright screen can give rise to problems
such
 as vision defects and headache in the long run. To recapitulate, I opine that the libraries are the safe and secure places used for their studies by the students irrespective of their abilities to afford the computers and
internet
 expenses.
Hence
, they should be maintained by the computers being an additional source.
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  • cultural hub
  • community engagement
  • digital divide
  • inequality
  • sustainable
  • affordability
  • technological advancement
  • information retrieval
  • hybrid resources
  • social interaction
  • evolution of libraries
  • complementary
  • access to information
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