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Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Some people think that if we aloud to our children to
use
 a laptop in their routine day can have a negative
impact
 rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 positive
.
Accept space
.
I agree with that view, but I see a few positive parts in
this
. Nowadays, we live in a century where technology is a part of our life.We have to accept that children have to learn how to
use
this
 technology, but we like adults have to supervise them to
use
 properly in order to prevent the negative
impact
 over their developments. If a child
use
 in excess a
computer
 his behaviour can suffer.
For example
,
computer
 games are very attractive for children, but
this
 can have an
impact
 over their psychology because they can become introverted and can replace the real games in a park with other children with virtual games on
computer
.Parents should establish a schedule for
this
 game and encourages the children to play in free spaces, to communicate with other's.Another negative
impact
 is that by using a
computer
 we forgot to write on a paper and it is possible that the conventional writing to disappear in the future.
Furthermore
, it is very known that obesity is a big problem in our days and I believe
that is
 because of
this
 'phenomenal invention '
,
Accept space
,
computer
 and internet.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
the Internet is our future and children has to learn to
use
 it.To think that every child has to have a
computer
 in his house and if is used properly can bring a lot of benefits in his life. To conclude, the disadvantages of using a
computer
 overweigh the advantages if the child starts to
use
 it too early and if is not supervised by an adult.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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