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Band 7

Mrs. Barrette, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs. Barrette. In your letter suggest how you could help her in her home why you would like to do this work when you will and will not available

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Dear Mrs. Barrette, I am writing
this
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 letter with regard to your advertisement in the part-time job section in the local newspaper. I am a gastronomy student and I would be delighted to work for you during
summer
Correct article usage
the summer
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. Since I love cooking and baking, it can be great for me to enjoy my summer holiday working in your kitchen. I can prepare an array of cuisines ranging from Asian food to Italian dishes. I really enjoy preparing delicious food to make my dinners happy,
therefore
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 I think
this
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 position can be a great opportunity for me to gain some invaluable experience.
In addition
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 to that, I am planning to travel abroad so I can cover some of my expenses with my income. I prefer to work during the week but in case you have guests I can work at weekends, as well. As you may
know
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know,
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 the academic term is not over yet,
therefore
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 I am not able to start working for you before 1st June. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely Taban Safa

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task achievement
Consider adding more details about your availability, such as specific days or times when you can work, to give Mrs. Barrette a clearer picture.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to give your paragraphs a clear focus on a single idea and connect them smoothly for better flow.
tone
You have a clear and friendly writing tone, making your letter engaging and approachable.
task completion
You addressed the main points of the task well, showing your interest in the position and providing relevant information.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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