Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Despite an extensive and harmful use of fossil fuels in nearly the whole world, many countries promote the use of renewable sources of power. I completely agree that not only should countries enforce ecological laws but they should

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promote them among

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way to achieve a better environment in the future is to promote eco-friendly laws that force large and small-scale corporations to cut their damage to the environment. Indeed, big corporations and factories are the greatest polluters that definitely need to cut their carbon emissions to maintain the current level of temperature or even reverse global warming.

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, electricity-producing companies start using solar, wind and hydro energy to cut their corruption of the air. Having done that, nearly seven hundred billion tons of carbon dioxide may be decreased yearly. A prime example of

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may be the countries of the European

Union which

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kind and made their air absolutely cleaner than it used to be ten years ago. Little do countries understand the importance of agitating eco-friendly lifestyle among the common people.

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, 60% of the pollution is created by common citizens that exploit

cars

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the cars

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of bicycles or do not save electric energy.

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, being the only carbon-negative country, Bhutan only promoted the ecological lifestyle among its people and succeeded to even change their mindset.

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, the citizens put solar panels and wind-powered stations

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of usual coal electric stations to power their houses. In conclusion, I firmly agree that if it were not for the promotion of a clean environment among corporations and common people, it would be impossible to develop a healthy future for the Earth so it is an advantageous strategy.

Nataliia LitovchenkoSun Jun 14 2020

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

287 words

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biodiversity
ecosystem
conservation status
ecological significance
holistic approach
endangered species
natural heritage
unforeseen negative impacts
economically non-viable
prioritization
ecosystem balance
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