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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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The represented line chart depicts information depicts information about energy consumption in the United States since 1980 with predictions until 2030. Overall, it can be clearly seen that solar/wind, water power and nuclear were less beneficial fuel throughout the whole duration. Looking
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 at the consumed oil, there can be noticed that
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 it was the most favourable type of fuel.
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, there is a state that oil have used 35 quadrillion units at the beginning of the given time with the projected 50 units at the end.
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, the represented trend was experienced with some fluctuations from 1985 to 1996. According to the data, coal and natural gas
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 was experienced with constant changes throughout the age.
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, in 1980 the total amount of consumed coal was almost 16 while the number of natural gas was 20 quadrillion units respectively. As it can be seen, the total number of units of coal with its projection will be 30 approximately, while the quantity of natural gas will remain the same with 23 units for the eventual years.
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, it is clear that 3 remaining types of fuel were the less favourable and there can be seen at least some fluctuations and no change for the whole given term.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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