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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture.

#accommodation #english #country #condition #furniture
Dear Sir/Madam, I am Josephine and I have been staying in your accommodation along with my family for four weeks. I have moved to
United Kingdom
Suggestion
the United Kingdom
 and I plan to live here for a minimum of 6 months. I really love the view from my balcony and the room is very spacious. My only issues are with the
furniture
 that was provided to us. The table is a bit wobbly and I am not able to place food items on it. The
chair
a motor vehicle with four wheels; usually propelled by an internal combustion engine
car
 handles are very sharp. The bed is very uncomfortable, and the mattress is very hard. The tables are too small for us to place food or other things over it. I would really appreciate it if it could be replaced with new
furniture
. It would be very helpful if the movers could transport the current
furniture
 to another place and provide us with new
furniture
 which is comfortable for me and my parents. Thank you for all the help you have provided to us during our stay.
Suggestion
Xyz
 Regards xyz
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