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Many people are copying famous celebrities from magazines and TV. Why is this happening? Do you think it’s good idea to copy celebrities?

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In many parts of the
world
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, it’s often seen that many people who are a fan of famous celebrities try to copy their characters or other sides of them. It’s a common
problem
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 today that our children who are around 8-12 years old are always able to be like famous people that they watched on
TV
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 or saw on journals.
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 can be seen, it’s quite true, but according to the
world
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, there are many sides of
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 is happening.
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 essay will discuss the advantages or disadvantages, and both sides of the
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.
Firstly
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, it must be recognised that if people try to copy many popular celebrities, it would change his or her
world
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 views to goodness. In
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 case, I strongly agree with
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 idea. Take Steeve Jobs,
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. He was one of the richest men in the
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. Or take Bill Gates for another instance. They were the most successful people in the planet cause of their individuality and characteristics.
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 is the strongest evidence of my opinion.
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 example clearly shows that if people is showing on
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 or in many different magazines are successful, clever or capable with any abilities, it must always be copied by other human who is trying to be like him or her.
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, there are some disadvantage sides of
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.
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, there are more people who play many roles for different advertisements on
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 other watching lines than people who play roles for educational programs. So,
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 is a big reason that I disagree with
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 side of the
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. They all change human’s mind and their capabilities all accept clever billions, genius and businessmen. Nowadays, there are many factories which are making lots of fake advertisements on
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 to multiply the number of their unreal products. So, after that while children watching
TV
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, they seen famous person who is using low-quality products that they advertised for big money. After all children will be fussy and demand their parents to buy these fake products to be alike famous people that they saw on
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 or journal. I strongly disagree with
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 side of the
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. In conclusion, according to the goodness of
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 I think it depends on people who is copying famous celebrities and person who is being copied with his or her popular quality.
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