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Prison is the only truly effective form of punishment because its separate criminals from society.

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There is no
second
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 thought to keep
community safe
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the community safe
 and away from the
offenders’
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offender’s
 jail is
suitable form
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a suitable form
 of penalizing criminals. I agree with the statement as they will feel guilty from the punishment,
secondly
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 retribution can give them a chance to
change
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 their self. When criminals get
sentences
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sentenced
 for lock-up they realize their mistake and feel guilt for everything which they have done. They feel that behind bars they will not be
allowing
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allowed
 to meet their family and friends every now and
then
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,
also
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 they are separated from society. They feel blameworthy because mankind will not accept them and their family and
may be
by chance
maybe
 every near one face humiliation
also
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.
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, society can embarrass them and boycott all the members from their building.
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, as we all know behind the bar rules are very strict to keep prisoners in controls. It can help them to
change
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themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 from a criminal to normal person. They can learn new skills and generate new habits which can
change
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 their life so that they will not be doing anything in
future which
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the future, which
the future which
 would be problematic for
community
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the community
 as well for their beloved one. I have seen many cases where jail has changed a person’s life in a good shape and they are contributing and helping in community’s betterment.
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At
last
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 I can say that lock up is useful to stay offenders from the public because of
this
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 public stay safe and healthy in their society and offenders
also
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 get a possibility to
change
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 their criminal mindsets. So, they will not repeat any blunder in
future
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the future

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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