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Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons is it possitive or negative development?

#people #money #possitive #development
Nowadays, people always struggle
in
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on
with
 how to manage their
money
. It is
belived
accept as true; take to be true
believed
 that man would rather spend their
money
 than save it for
rainny
(of weather) wet by periods of rain
rainy
 days. A plethora of people are opting to spend their
money
 than saving it.
This
 essay discusses for
this
 and
then
 explains why
this
 is a negative development
Primary reason
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The primary reason
 that people cannot be able to save
money
 is, their shopping addiction. Due to
development
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the development
 of technology, people can buy anything they want at any time, just at the button, from
comfort
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the comfort
 of their home.
For
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In
 particular,
this
 is a serious problem among young generation.
For instance
, a friend of mine, Jane, who used to be
a
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an
 accountant, spent most of her
income buying
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income, buying
 trendy clothes and shoes and even became
a
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an
 overdue borrower
last
 year.
Example like
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An example, like
An example like
this
clearly show
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clearly shows
 how shopping addiction has
a
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an
 awful influence on a person’s spending habit.
Moreover
, changes of style
leads
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lead
 to a negative outcome. In the past, the average
period which
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period, which
 took people to buy their
first
 home was 7 years, but it now takes more than 14 years after
graduation
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graduating
 from university. With
this
 kind of negative habits mentioned above, people
can not
can not
cannot
 even have
20% deposit
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a 20 % deposit
 in order to get pre- approval for a
first
 home from a bank.
In other words
, those who are not good at saving would suffer the
povery
the state of having little or no money and few or no material possessions
poverty
 or become a homeless later in life. In
conlussion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
concussion
consolation
, a lot of people do not save
money
 and
instead
 they prefer
spending an enormous of
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spending an enormous
money
 on online shopping. I believe
this
 is a negative trend and cause financial crisis in the near future.
Submitted by Thanh Huong on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant gratification
  • consumer culture
  • financial literacy
  • economic optimism
  • financial instability
  • indebtedness
  • stimulating economic growth
  • personal satisfaction
  • innovation
  • job creation
  • investment
  • wealth accumulation
  • advertising
  • social media
  • luxury lifestyles
  • financial planning
  • future security
  • emergencies
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