Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Some people believe that this is an illness and should be treated medically. Others feel that this is only a result of unhealthy habits and it is sport that must help. Discuss both point of view and give your own opinion.

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In today’s world childhood obesity is one of the most pressing problems. There are many reasons for

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issue and many effects have been associated with it.

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, I believe that several steps could be followed to improve

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situation. There are two main factors that

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to children obesity. One is bad eating habits: eating junk foods like MacDonald’s and drinking sugary soft drinks. Another possible factor could be that children nowadays tend to have a sedentary lifestyle, they play computer games, chat on the internet rather than doing sport or playing outside. As a consequence, of these factors, children these days are becoming obese. They are overweight, unhealthy and unfit to play or to do any physical exercise. Another devastating effect is that, the higher risk of heart diseases, diabetes and cancer. These diseases put a strain on hospitals and they are going to be a heavy burden in the future.

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, I think there are several measurements can be done by parents, governments and schools.

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, giving children healthy food, control what they eat and ensure that they have a healthy diet.

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, the diet that includes more vegetables and less fat contents.

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, governments can limit junk food advertisements or prohibit those which are directed to children.

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, restrict the time they spend on computer and video games, and encourage them to do regular exercise. In conclusion, it is true that obesity among children with its negative impacts, is growing at an alarming

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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Grammatical Range: 7.0

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