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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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The bar chart gives information about four types of Accommodation where students lived over the course of 40 years, starting in the 1960s. Looking at the graph it is immediately obvious that the percentage of students lived in a shared house experienced an upward trend in
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 period, while, The scale of students chooses hall of resident at their place of living had seen significant downward.Meanwhile,
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 both features were the same as They had been at the beginning of the period. A more detailed look at the graph reveal that the scope of students chooses to live with a host family and the percentage of students lived At home with own family fluctuated.Between the 1960s and 2000s
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 type of accommodation dropped. A similar trend witnessed in those who live with their parents, but after that,
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 rate remained steady at 1980 to 1990 at 5 percent.
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 figure approximately increased by 8 percent. Overall the most noticeable things that the capacity of students lived in shared flat with other student was suddenly rose.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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