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BY PUNISHING MURDERERS WITH THE DEATH PENALTY, SOCIETY IS ALSO GUILTY OF COMMITTING MURDER. THEREFORE LIFE IN PRISON IS BETTER PUNISHMENT FOR MURDERERS. TO WHAT EXTENT SO YOU AGREE OF DISAGREE.

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Today, we can see an increased number of criminals in the society.
This
 is because, many of the people are involved with a number of misbehaviour activities and
this
 has been ruined the community. Due to the technological advantages in the modern world, people have already created a busy lifestyle and they are going with a competitive life.
As a result
 of
this
, reckless of the life style and imbalance of the lifestyle has been increased to the number of criminals today.
Therefore
,
this
 essay will explain whether those murderers required that
such
death
penalty
 or whether to keeping them in prison as a
punishment
. In that case, following essay will explain my viewpoints in detail and will reach to a conclusion.
Therefore
, I strongly believe that, it is necessary to apply certain rules for the criminals and the
death
penalty
 is not the option for
such
 individuals. As we can see, Today many of the people are engaged to the several criminals
such
 as murdering, kidnapping, drug activities and antisocial activities. Thereby, it's necessary that government to look at the level of crime of
such
 crimes in order to make the judgement about the appropriate
punishment
. The
death
penalty
 is not compulsory for every criminal person. It is required to look the criminal history and
then
 it is needed to apply the rules and regulations based on the
such
 circumstances. In order to do that, referring to those certain rules and regulations is mandatory for the most cases. Based on the
such
 given cases and circumstances,
then
 it's required to apply the appropriate
punishment
 and
then
 it's required to apply the proper judgement. In conclusion, It can be said that, the
death
penalty
 is not required for the many cases, but it's necessary to review the criminal case and that surrounded nature in order to make a decision about the
punishment
.
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