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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).

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It is argued that students should be forced to do free public services as an enforced part of the high
school
 curriculum.
This
 essay agrees that unpaid society services should be in high
school
 programs.
This
 essay will
first
 discuss the benefits of team working for students and
secondly
, discuss the advantages that the
community
 gets from these students who dedicate to help the public. There are a lot of benefits that students going to get from working for a charity. The main advantage that they will get is
management
 skills. Charity project makes people work as a team and requires team members to have
management
 skills. A study conducted in Shrewsbury high
school
 showed that students who joined charity working in
school
 are more likely to have better
management
 skills when they enter into
workforce market
Suggestion
the workforce market
 in the future.
Therefore
, charity working will improve people’s
management
 skills when they get a job.
Furthermore
, apart from the advantage that benefits students themselves.
This
 type of public service
also
 benefits and helps the
community
 in many ways without any bailout from the government. Some areas in the country need help from these people who do
this
 kind of services
such
 as drought or flood. Take a look at a flood in Thailand in 2015 as an example, the flood took over many houses in
north
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northern
 rural areas of Thailand.
However
, with a lot of help from students and soldiers who dedicated themselves to get into the areas and contributed food and water for sufferers. The tragic disaster was passed safely without any death. It is for these reasons, unpaid
community
 services will have a great impact on our society when it is an enforced part of high
school
 programs. In conclusion, teenagers should make an unpaid public service as a part of the
school
 curriculum because it will not only benefit the students themselves, but it will help the
community
 from many disasters in the future.
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