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Governments should spend more money on medical research and less on researching the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #research #environment
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Every country is investing a substantial amount
for
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of
in
research
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 and development work nowadays. While many may argue that medical
research
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 should be prioritized over
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environment
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the environment
, I disagree. According to me, understanding our
environment
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 more can truly be beneficial and can even help in
evolution
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the evolution
 of
medical field
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the medical field
.
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, it is well known now that human activities have been affecting the world
environment
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 adversely, because of which, at recent times, there is a rise in natural calamities like draught, flood, cyclones etc. There are numerous news of many more, coming from all over the world.
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, a few months ago, there was Australian wildfire and
then
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 a few months prior to that we heard of Amazon wild fire.
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, we need to study our
environment
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 and find out how we can reverse the changes, which will help to stabilize the entire system.
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, if we do not carry out
research
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 on our surroundings, we will fail to discover new elements or biological bodies in our
environment
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. New medical discoveries or new medicines can be invented based on these researches as well.
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,
leaves
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the leaves
 of many plants can cure even the harshest diseases.
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, it is
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 necessary that we invest
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in
 studying our nature as well. To conclude,
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 medical
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 activities are of utmost importance, we should not forget our
environment
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 as in the times of pandemics and new viruses, there is no doubt that mother nature holds a lot more secrets, which are yet to be discovered.
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 why, as per my opinion, environmental studies should be prioritized more as
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 may
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 help us
on
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in
with
 achieving medical miracles.
Submitted by Amrita Dey on

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