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Some systems require students to speacialize in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school? What are the benefits of two education systems and what is better ? You should write at least 250 words.

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There is no doubt these
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limited
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the two systems
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more beneficial
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speacilize
become more focus on an area of activity or field of study
specialize
specialise
specializes
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range
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 of
subject
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 that let students memorize more knowledge and make them to
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reach, make, or come to a decision about something
decide
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, give students more freedom to choose what they prefer to
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, students can focus on the essential
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an educational institution
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a wide range
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subjects
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scientific subjects
a scientific subject
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, what is the difference of them and how they are beginning.
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, studying
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a wide range
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 of subjects is leading students' memory can acquire large information in smell period.
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students'
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. In the systems require
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a wide range
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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