Many people think that zoos are cruel. Others think they are helpful in protecting rare animals. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

According to some people's opinion, zoos are violating the rights of wild animals.

However

, their opponents think that, those zoos are crucial for saving the endangered species of animals. I totally agree with the latter thought because by doing so animals can reproduce themselves in safe places. It is undeniable that, to save rare specimens of animals, zoos are taking the responsibility to their shoulders.

However

, due to negligence towards those animals, staffs can make a blunder during their work.

For instance

, animals can be punished by employees not to eat

meal

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a meal

the meal

meals

Nevertheless

, it is not

sole factor

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the sole factor

to deduce that they are

violant

acting with or marked by or resulting from great force or energy or emotional intensity

violent

. It depends on

animal

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the animal

an animal

animals

because they react negatively to the orders of their handler. Their primary aim is to keep those animals, but they are not severe and punish them due to indispensable remedy, I guess.

Anually

Suggestion

Annually

Accept space

over the globe 50% of wild and rare animals are saved and brought to their natural habitats.

Moreover

, not every single person acknowledges the main reason of saving Endangered animals in

captive

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captivity

This

is because of reproducing them

Accept space

I think. It is obvious that, there

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are

only insignificant numbers of animals which were exorbitant in

past

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the past

. And zoo's purpose is to determine

such

animals.

Then

, they are feeding them on measured doses of meals to make sure they

are addicting

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are addicted

to them. After they feel free in zoos, the special staffs bring back them to their natural habitat. In China Pandas are sacred and if they cease to populate couples sent to zoos to reproduce them.

This

was announced as

smart way

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a smart way

the smart way

to keep animals by Experts in 2015. To conclude, it would be incorrect if we think negatively about zoos, because from there we would save the

wild life

all living things (except people) that are undomesticated

wildlife

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Topic Vocabulary:

animal welfare
conservation
captive breeding
habitat
ethical issues
zoochosis
endangered species
genetic diversity
reintroduction programs
wildlife education
sanctuary
natural living conditions
artificial environments
behavioral enrichment
ecosystem

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