many people are copying the famous celebrities from magazines and TV Why is this happening ? Do you think it is a good idea to copy celebrities ?

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In these our contemporary world majority of people are trying to imitate their idolized famous people by watching them on TV or from magazines. In my opinion, all of
this
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replication is done due to
popularity
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the popularity
among public,
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,
this
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could be
end
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ended
with bad habits. It is obvious that, more and more people become
fan
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fans
of some celebrities
for instance
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actors or sportsman.
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is
videly
to a great degree
widely
spread among school children, due to
popularity
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the popularity
of those people, I think.
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, for the most part youngsters are prone to follow
fashion
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the fashion
and clothings of their admired person. In most cases
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the student
a student
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is
highly likely to wear them and by doing so, they can maintain popularity among their fellow mates, in my view. According to
recent survey
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a recent survey
recent surveys
conducted in one of the schools of Boston it is shown that, over half of students get a kick out of replicating celebrities by imitating their character and wearing clothes like them.
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, there can be myriads of disadvantages and problems which
are related
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relate
to their age, behaviour or even studies.
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example when
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example, when
copying famous people, youngsters can be involved in
doing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
bad habits like smoking, alcohol intake or even they are likely to learn insulting phrases from movies.
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, they may go down in flames in their academic life by
gettingg
the act of acquiring something
getting
mixed up all slangs with academic words
,
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,
for instance
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. The experiments conducted by University of New York gained information about alteration in
child's
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child
psychology. According to its findings, every other 3 pupil in school started to smoke due to imitating celebrities from films. To conclude, whereas most of people try to look like celebrities, young one can obtain their habits from films where they smoke and
this
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is the global problem, in my view.
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  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
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