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total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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From the figure it is clearly depicted that in 1950, China had the most percentage of
population
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, nearly 25% of total world's
population
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. Whereas India was
on
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in
 the
second
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 position with almost 15% contribution in world's
popultion
the people who inhabit a territory or state
population
. USA and Japan had very less world's
population
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 contribution which is almost 8% and 4% respectively in 1950. <br> Significantly, the trend has changed in 2002, in which China controlled its
population
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 growth and come to 20% from 23%.
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Similarly
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Similarly, population
population
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 of
USA
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the USA
 and Japan
also
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 decreased.
On the contrary
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,
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population
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the population
 of India has increased from 15% to almost 18%.<br> <br> In the 2050, it is estimated that India will follow the same rising trend in
population
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&apos;s growth. While the other countries will control it and reduce
thier
of them or themselves
their
population
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.
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, Japan will
remarkabely
to a remarkable degree or extent
remarkably
 reduce its
population
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growth which
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growth, which
 will only be 1-2% of total world&apos;s
population
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.<br> <br>

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