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International marketing is sometimes seen as invasive and an intrusion into the country in question. Others argue that it is a necessary and economical form of education in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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One of the most interesting topics to discuss in current times is, global marketing is spreading all over the world without any limitations while some people argue that global marketing is coming into the
nation
 at rapid speed.
On the other hand
, some argue that it is important to see global marketing is expanding in every
nation
 because,
this
 adds exchange of ideas, languages, and cultures among the nations. In
this
 essay, we will discuss both sides of the question and I will give my opinion. One group of people
strongly argue
Suggestion
strongly argues
 that global marketing is a major threat to the
nation
 because, if everyone is interested in buying products from big companies, the local business will go into a huge loss. Perhaps,
this
 will affect the
nation
's economy.
Moreover
, global marketing is coming into small towns where there is no place to earn profits.
However
,
this
 is not recommended.
Lastly
, the government is
also
 trying to spread global marketing into every corner of the
nation
 without asking public opinion. Despite,
this
 will cause a major impact on the local business.
On the other hand
, some people argue that spreading global marketing will help the
nation
 to improve its economy and give strong competition to other countries. In the same way, international marketing will help the
nation
 to expose various languages, cultures, and technology. In the same way, it will give a lot of employment to the graduates.
As a result
, we can see a strong economic
nation
 in a short time. In conclusion, I suggest that international marketing is important to spread in the
nation
, but with some limitations, where the local businesses should not be affected.
Submitted by Jo Hn on

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