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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is very necessary for the government of any country to ensure that law and order is maintained in their nation. But we see that around the
world there
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world, there
 has been an increase in the
crime
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 rates.
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 there is
need
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a need
 to make our law system even
more stronger
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stronger
. In any nation there are various kinds of
punishment
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that is
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 given to the guilty
person
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 which varies from
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death
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the death penalty
penalty
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 to life imprisonment or money
penalty
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. The type of
punishment
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 is based on
type
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the type
 of
crime
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 that the guilty
person
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 had committed. The more serious the
crime
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 more serious
punishment
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 the accused is given. It is rare that a
person
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 is given a capital
punishment
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 or
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death
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the death penalty
penalty
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, but it is equally important as any other
punishment
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. If there won’t be any
death
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penalty
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,
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 there will no fear among the criminals and the
crime
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 rates would go even more higher.
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 it becomes an important part of the judiciary system and certainly helps to secure law and order.
Also
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, as mentioned above it is very rare that a
person
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 is given a
death
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punishment
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therefore
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, it means that for very serious crimes like rape or mass murder charges
such
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punishment
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 is given. So, without capital
punishment
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 the seriousness of
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crime
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the crime
a crime
 would
also
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 increase
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I
.e.
more violent
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Most violent
More violent
 crimes would be taking place in our society.
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, just a few days back the court passed the decision to give
death
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penalty
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 to the all four rapists of the Nirbhaya incident.
This
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 rock-hard decision will surely leave someone cold for even thinking about
such
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 criminal activity.
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 capital
punishment
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 plays an essential role in controlling violence and help in maintaining a well secure and
crime
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 free nation.
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