Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is very necessary for the government of any country to ensure that law and order is maintained in their nation. But we see that around the
world there
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world, there
has been an increase in the
crime
rates.
Hence
there is
need
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a need
to make our law system even
more stronger
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stronger
. In any nation there are various kinds of
punishment
that is
given to the guilty
person
which varies from
death
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the death penalty
penalty
to life imprisonment or money
penalty
. The type of
punishment
is based on
type
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the type
of
crime
that the guilty
person
had committed. The more serious the
crime
more serious
punishment
the accused is given. It is rare that a
person
is given a capital
punishment
or
death
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the death penalty
penalty
, but it is equally important as any other
punishment
. If there won’t be any
death
penalty
,
then
there will no fear among the criminals and the
crime
rates would go even more higher.
Hence
it becomes an important part of the judiciary system and certainly helps to secure law and order.
Also
, as mentioned above it is very rare that a
person
is given a
death
punishment
therefore
, it means that for very serious crimes like rape or mass murder charges
such
punishment
is given. So, without capital
punishment
the seriousness of
crime
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the crime
a crime
would
also
increase
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.e.
more violent
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Most violent
More violent
crimes would be taking place in our society.
For example
, just a few days back the court passed the decision to give
death
penalty
to the all four rapists of the Nirbhaya incident.
This
rock-hard decision will surely leave someone cold for even thinking about
such
criminal activity.
Hence
capital
punishment
plays an essential role in controlling violence and help in maintaining a well secure and
crime
free nation.
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