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In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the future people might resort to neighbouring planets,
thus
 it is crucially important to foster interplanetary exploration.People should explore new territories in order to extract the resources,
however
; the Earth should not be abandoned. It is thought, that people should preserve the contemporary biosphere on the
planet
 Earth as it will be more effective to restructure the
society
 than to settle on an entirely uninhabitable
planet
.The advocates of
this
 idea state that it will more viable to ameliorate the effects of human life on Earth, than to
terraform
 the neighbouring
planet
. Policymakers are considered to enforce laws to decrease the carbon emissions and to conserve the environment for it to be inhabitable.
On the other hand
, it is more pragmatic for space explorations to be funded sufficiently due to the fact that it might contribute to contemporary
society
.
In other words
, by the time people start exploring planets with abundant mineral resources, the materials should be transferred back to Earth in order for the
society
 to prosper. The colonisation of the planets is underpinned by the past. If it were not for the great geographical discoveries, the fabric of
society
 and general technological level would be disturbingly lower compared to modernity. Under no circumstance, the pursuit to explore new planets should be impaired,
instead
 they are to be facilitated as it will
favor
promote over another
favour
 the development of social
,
Accept space
,
material and technological aspects of people. To sum up, in the forthcoming centuries livelihood should resettle from earth onto other planets. I concur, with the fact that people should explore new planets in order to salvage resources from there. Not only, the contemporary issues on Earth should not be exacerbated in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of settling on a new
planet
, but
also
 they should be ameliorated since it will be less expensive than permanently establishing a civilization on new planets
such
 as Mars.
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