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The system used for rubbish collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing Problems for you and your neighbors .

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Nowadays, many of the people are starting to concern about the environment. When talking about the environment, it is an essential to discuss about the recycling
rubbish
. It is true that, any government in a country, should need to carry a proper plan towards
this
collection
 of
rubbish
.
Therefore
, following
this
 essay will explain my viewpoints in detail and
then
 will reach to a proper conclusion.
Further
, I'll going to discuss about the several problems occurring through
this
rubbish
collection
system
. So, many of the people are now, consuming so many things even though many are not aware of
this
.
This
 happens, due to the technological advancements and complicated lifestyle has arisen in
this
 world. In the meantime, people are using several things which can be recycled and non- recycling products. When talking about these non recycling products, it can be harmful to the environment and which are non as electronic devices, gadgets, polythene bags, plastic items and much more. When talking about the recycling
items
Suggestion
Items
, these are the one's that easily destroy and user friendly to the nature and which is known to produce a less environmental
pollution
 and has a minimum impact
to
Suggestion
on
 the nature.
However
, when talking about the
system
 of
rubbish
collection
, it has to have a proper
system
otherwise
 it can threaten to the surrounded people and neighbours in the living areas which
also
 can create several issues
such
 as air
pollution
, asthma, heart diseases and much more.
Therefore
, those responsible parties have to take the responsibility to the
such
 departments to carry these systems appropriate ways and the effective manner
then
 it can prevent many of the issues and will be helpful to avoid the environmental
pollution
.
In addition
 to
this
,
such
of
Suggestion
by
 the authorities has a responsibility to the monitor and the review of the
such
 departments, tasks so it ensures that everything will be going right. In conclusion, It can be said that, the responsible parties must need to raise their voice to create a correct
system
 of
rubbish
collection
 and
This
 prevents many of the problems and It
also
 mainly help to avoid the environmental
pollution
 in
this
 world.
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