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🔶Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. 🔸To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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By increasing serious problems like indigence, unemployment and disease in many parts of the world, the need for the wealthy
people
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person
person's
 donation feel more and more. I completely agree that rich people by providing job opportunities and subscription can contribute poor people to have a better
lives
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life
. Poverty and unemployment have caused a lot of problems for poor people and following that for the society.
Fortunately there
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Fortunately, there
 are many people who care about these people and help them have better lives
.
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.
although
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Although
 many of them are not very rich, they by establishing charities and collecting public donations help poor people.
Furthermore
, wealthy people can do an entrepreneurship for individuals who are
unemployed especially
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unemployed, especially
 for householders and youth who are forming their family. By providing job opportunities individuals’ talents and abilities will be
flourished which
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flourished, which
 Will make
brighter future
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a brighter future
brighter futures
 for societies. Some may argue that donating causes some problems like demotivating poor people to strive harder,
however
, I believe that by contributing indigence and disabled individuals financially and providing job opportunities for work forces not only will they not be demotivated but
also
 they will be encouraged to improve their lives better and healthier. In conclusion, I am certain that if wealthy people with entrepreneurship and financial aid contribute poor and jobless people to have convenient lives, their donations will definitely make the societies healthier and safer for everyone in the world .
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