In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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In certain nations, people are getting heavier, unhealthier and more physically unfit.

Firstly

this

essay will discuss the sedentary

lifestyle

individuals now lead that has led to the above issues.

Secondly

this

essay will discuss a possible solution which aims at encouraging people to exercise more; followed by a reasoned conclusion. One principal cause as to why people are becoming more obese and unhealthier is due to their sedentary

lifestyle

. As more people now work office jobs, they spend most of their day working by their desk without much movement. There is

then

no way for these individuals

to burn

Suggestion

burn

the calories they take in, leading to them gaining weight.

For instance

, the obesity rate in Singapore has increased over the

last

decade as more people land in white-collar jobs.

Moreover

, a staggering 1 in 3 Singaporeans is at risk of contracting diabetes due to the inactive

lifestyle

people are leading. The solution to address

this

should be targeted at encouraging people to work out.

This

can be done through giving monetary incentives to individuals who exercise, and setting achievable goals so they are more inclined to lead a healthier

lifestyle

. To address the problem of rising obesity rates in Singapore, the government has introduced the 10,000 Steps Challenge whereby anyone who clocks in 10,000 steps through their tracker can redeem shopping vouchers.

This

challenge has served to stop the obesity rates from rising. In conclusion, the main cause as to why people are getting

more fat

Suggestion

fatter

, unhealthier and more physically unfit is due to their current inactive

lifestyle

. To tackle

this

cause, incentives should be provided to encourage people to change their

lifestyle

for the better.

Submitted by Mak Wai Theng on Thu Jun 18 2020

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1Word repetition
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2Grammar mistakes
 

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277 words

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Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary
obesity
overweight
physical activity
sedentary lifestyle
exercise
unhealthy diet
fast food
urbanization
modernization
stress
awareness
education
government intervention
policies
promotion
sports
fitness programs
health education
taxation
public transportation
infrastructure
parks
recreational spaces

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