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Some people use the internet to search for solutions to their medical problems. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples from your experience.

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Technology is the fastest growing sector in our country.The use of technology has widened the information sector for today's generation.People make use of
internet
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the internet
 to search and surf around the world for the
lastest
up to the immediate present; most recent or most up-to-date
latest
 updates. But
now a days
in these times
nowadays
 individuals are making use of network in a negative sense.They search for things which aren't to be surfed which leads them into trouble.
For
instance people
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instance, people
start
Suggestion
starting
 to search medicines on google writing their symptoms.The internet being a public platform has all
soughts
a category of things distinguished by some common characteristic or quality
sorts
 of answers.Youth takes medicines without any prescribed doctor
thus
 ending up into problems. The medicines can have
huge impact
Suggestion
a huge impact
 on their lives.I would like to share
a
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an
 episode wherein a friend of mine took the drugs seeing from
internet
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the internet
 which
further
 had problems with his liver.He had undergone various
treatments
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treatments, then
then
 so as to get healthy again. People should be aware about the pros and cons of using
network
Suggestion
a network
the network
networks
.Individuals from all
oer
at a higher position than
over
 the world comment on google and are not much educated.The development of technology should be used in a positive note and
thus
 avoiding the negative impacts and have a sound and healthy body.
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