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Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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The
conflict
 between teenage and parents is a topic of interest. People have different views about whether
teenage
Suggestion
a teenage conflict
conflict
 with their parents as a necessary part of growing up. While some argue that
conflict
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the conflict
 between teenage and parents is something
negative which
Accept comma addition
negative, which
 should be avoided, I personally believe that it is a necessary part of growing up. There are several reasons why people feel that
conflict
 is something harmful and can be prevented. It could create a bad habit for children. When there is a problem, they always argue with their parents, or with people around them, regardless of their emotions. The
conflict
 between parents and children
also
 makes the atmosphere of the family unhappy. Members of the family may
also
 feel uncomfortable and stressed. As a consequence, not only do parents have an impact on work and sluggish growth, but their children
also
 have an influence on school learning.
However
, I agree with those who argue that
conflict
 is important because it can help adolescents to mature. Children will make their own beliefs and support the opinions they believe are correct as they disagree with their parents.
This
 can help them to express their opinions confidently, critical thinking in front of people.
This
 can help them to express their opinions confidently, critical thinking in front of people. After arguments with parents, it
also
 helps parents and children to understand each other better.
In addition
,
conflict
 between parents and children often helps them improve their problem-solving skills as they arise when interacting with parents. In conclusion,
although
 it might seem sensible to have a lot of negative effects on the
conflict
 between teenagers and parents, I believe that it is a necessary part of growing up.
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