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Some high schools have a requirement that students must complete a certain amount of volunteer work in order to graduate. What do you think about this type of requirement? Give details to support your opinion

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In some schools, it is a mandatory requirement that a certain amount of
volunteer
work
 must be done by the students in order to graduate. In my opinion, I believe that
volunteer
work
 must be compulsory as it will greatly benefit both individuals and
society
. A good reason to carry out
volunteer
work
 during graduation is that
student
Suggestion
students
the student
a student
 will develop compassion in their nature.
This
 produces
positive attitude
Suggestion
positive attitudes
a positive attitude
 in students towards humanity. By teaching basic school subjects to the underprivileged children, arranging medical facilities for the poor,
for instance
, students get to know the problems of people and
this
 lead to enhance their problem solving skills.
Furthermore
, students can improve their time management skills by managing their education and
volunteer
work
 at the same time.
This
 will greatly help them
handling
Suggestion
handle
 multiple tasks in their future career. Another point to consider is that having
volunteer
work
 as a requirement for graduation means that
society
 will get benefit in the long run as more people with the caring attitude and leadership skills become part of
society
.
For example
, if students do
volunteer
work
 in their community, many problems of
society
 will be resolved at ground level.
In other words
,
whole community
Suggestion
the whole community
 will get
benefit
Suggestion
the benefit
 and especially proportion of
society
 with less resources.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
this
 can bring more economic advantages to a country as people will be self-sustaining for solving basic problems. In conclusion,
volunteer
work
 is a must for students in order to graduate as it will enhance their managerial skills which will ultimately be providing benefits to
society
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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