Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement To what extent do you think law are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?
Nowadays from abundant manufactured
product
, the side effect is overshadowed, Waste. In many Fix the agreement mistake
products
country
the Change to a plural noun
countries
recycle
rate is noticeably low and the Change the verb form
recycling
system
is not well developed as well This
also
fairly controversial Add a missing verb
is also
that
the sanction of Correct word choice
because
government
is required by legislating Correct article usage
the government
law
. To begin
with, this
is obviously noticeable that government
did not attempt any Correct article usage
the government
taking
action in many countries. Aside from mandate legislation, Wrong verb form
take
any
Correct determiner usage
no
system
haven’t
established in many countries Wrong verb form
has been
For example
In UK
, Most Correct article usage
the UK
of recycle
Wrong verb form
recycling
system
is remarkably simple. The trashes are
divided into 2 Correct subject-verb agreement
trash is
separation
general rubbish, and paper and bottles. And even as to domestic trash, there is Replace the word
separate
even
Rephrase
apply
any
separation to recycle. So people Correct determiner usage
no
just
can leave their domestic trash at once without going through recycling. So in Rephrase
apply
this
system
, people can not follow doing
recycling even if they want it. Meanwhile some countries like Korea and Japan, all recycling is mandatorily proceeded. Every place the recycling place and side is obvious so people can easily approach Wrong verb form
do
to
Change preposition
apply
this
place and the division section is also
noticeable. In reality
the recycling rate in both Korea and Japan is over 90%, Add a comma
reality,
this
suggest
that Change the verb form
suggests
the
recycling can be smoothly operated without mandatory legislation or imposing fine. Correct article usage
apply
Obviously
there are specific Add a comma
Obviously,
law
related Fix the agreement mistake
laws
with
recycling Change preposition
to
however
the fine is quite small. To conclude
, As above
2 examples Correct article usage
the above
implied
, the Wrong verb form
imply
system
is not going with individual
Add an article
the individual
process
. Probably if the Fix the agreement mistake
processes
system
is not enough robust and just the law
is proceeded
, the is not going to work clearly, Change to the active voice
proceeds
has proceeded
Meanwhile
even if Add a comma
Meanwhile,
good
Add an article
a good
system
is introduced there is no compulsory in order word if someone sneaky breaks the rule, this
will eventually lead to confusion referring to broken windows theory. All the system
is required with mandatory law
for compulsory implement
.Replace the word
implementation
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite