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Some people that passports are essential as a way of regulating the population of countries. Others believe they should be abolished and we should be able to travel where we like. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion

In our contemporary world, several problems have brought to
attention
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the attention
 of
public
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the public
, and one of them is that of having
passports which
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passports, which
is leading
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are leading
this
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 issue to become
matter
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a matter
 of considerable controversy. And in today's confabulation, one school of thought surmise that identification card should be necessary for all individuals. But
on the other hand
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, others claim that certain certificates should be abrogated and population should make travels whenever they desire without passports. And
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 essay will display a
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 discussion on
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 topic before reaching any conclusion.
To begin
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 with,
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 essay will fundamentally support a former view. Incipiently, with assistance of
passports
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passports, government
government
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 can make a control as well as they can implement some rules which could help it. And in that
way knowing
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way, knowing
such
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 growing population could come as a dilemma and passports can make an opportunity to work effectively in
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moments
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moment
.
Secondly
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, without ID
cards
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card
 crime rates can increase tremendously. As
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government
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the government
can not
can not
cannot
 be informed about a person who committed a crime.
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Furthermore in
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Furthermore, in
 all passports there are would be enough details to identify the individuality of gangsters.
On the other hand
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 there some people who are of the opinion like
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 kind of documents about identity should be abated in order to do flights much more frequently. Precisely, individuals can be free from stressful documentations before their flight. But it is
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hand detrimental
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hand, detrimental
 they
can not
can not
cannot
 be under the control of
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government
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the government
 without passports. As with
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government population
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government, population
 can be shielded from political pressures which they are suffering in other countries. To
conclude it
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conclude, it
 is advantageous for people in order to make flights in certain aspects. But collaterally it has its own disadvantages in terms of politics and as well as controlling crime.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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