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Do you agree that individuals are responsible for their own happiness or it depends on the factors of the person's life?

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There exists a controversial notion that happiness in
life
 is based on materialistic possessions and wealth a person has. According to me, a person is in charge of his own joy and it is connected directly to their personal soul.
This
 essay would elucidate the reasons for unhappiness and how can one turn himself positive throughout.
To begin
 with, Folks nowadays compares themselves with others based on the possessions they own.
For instance
, people in my society collates others status by measuring their assets like cars, house etc.
Such
 an idea makes them unhappy about their stages in
life
 and tends tends feel less superior to others.
Furthermore
, Humans are derived from money and luxury.
this
Suggestion
This
 demands a stressful
life
 where they forget the essence of
life
.
This
 can lead to depression and many other health issues. Happiness is the pursuit of
life
 and it doesn't come from owning a particular subject. Any joy obtained from
such
 action would fade away after a few days.
Instead
 real happiness is created within. An individual should be able to follow his passion and make choices that would create satisfaction in his growth. In my conviction, a person is responsible for his own happiness because he is the one who decides for
himselves
.
This
 can
also
 be created with spending quality with your family and loved ones. Staying positive throughout can bring merry into your
life
 and make it much easier. In conclusion, I believe Happiness is to be made within. Money and other possessions can't bring pleasure. So live a
life
that is
 worth it.
Submitted by jesna tomy on

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