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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT ALLOWING CHILDREN TO MAKE THEIR OWN DECISION ON EVERYDAY MATTERS IS LIKELY TO RESULT IN A SOCIETY OF INDIVIDUALS WHO ONLY THINK ABOUT THEIR OWN WISHES. OTHER PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS IMPORTANT FOR CHILDREN TO MAKE DECISION ABOUT MATTERS THAT AFFECT THEM. DISCUSS BOTH OPINIONS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION

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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT ALLOWING CHILDREN TO MAKE THEIR OWN
DECISION
 ON EVERYDAY MATTERS IS LIKELY TO
RESULT
 IN A
SOCIETY
 OF INDIVIDUALS WHO ONLY THINK ABOUT THEIR OWN WISHES. OTHER PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS IMPORTANT FOR CHILDREN TO MAKE
DECISION
 ABOUT MATTERS THAT AFFECT THEM. SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT ALLOWING CHILDREN TO MAKE THEIR OWN
DECISION
 ON EVERYDAY MATTERS IS LIKELY TO
RESULT
 IN A
SOCIETY
 OF INDIVIDUALS WHO ONLY THINK ABOUT THEIR OWN WISHES. OTHER PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS IMPORTANT FOR CHILDREN TO MAKE
DECISION
 ABOUT MATTERS THAT AFFECT THEM.SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT ALLOWING CHILDREN TO MAKE THEIR OWN
DECISION
 ON EVERYDAY MATTERS IS LIKELY TO
RESULT
 IN A
SOCIETY
 OF INDIVIDUALS WHO ONLY THINK ABOUT THEIR OWN WISHES. OTHER PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS IMPORTANT FOR CHILDREN TO MAKE
DECISION
 ABOUT MATTERS THAT AFFECT THEM. SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT ALLOWING CHILDREN TO MAKE THEIR OWN
DECISION
 ON EVERYDAY MATTERS IS LIKELY TO
RESULT
 IN A
SOCIETY
 OF INDIVIDUALS WHO ONLY THINK ABOUT THEIR OWN WISHES. OTHER PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS IMPORTANT FOR CHILDREN TO MAKE
DECISION
 ABOUT MATTERS THAT AFFECT THEM.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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