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These days, more people are going to university than in the past. They start work later in life and with higher qualifications. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Youths aiming for higher
education
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 are a very common scenario seen now a days.They prefer going to a university since they want to be highly educated.I agree with the above statement,
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however there
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however, there
 are some negative effects for attaining highest qualification.
Education
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 is the key to a successful future.Children nowadays are very particular about their
education
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.They want to be highly educated from the most reputed colleges so as to get a good job in the future.Traditionally, parents weren'
t
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 concerned about the
education
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 of their child as they want their lamb to be married as early as possible as they want to shed all the responsibility of their child.Lately
,
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youths are capable enough to arrange the fees for their college or university as they don'
t
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 want to be a burden on their parents.Generations don'
t
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 want the society to call their parents a poor stigma of the society and
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 they tend to work hard to earn a good living.
For example
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, youths studying in Canada do part time jobs which are not only a source of income for them, but they can
gain
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 self independence and not asking the families to pay the loans for
further
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education
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.
On the other hand
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, some parents married off their children so that at least amount of money could be spent on them.The youths at that time weren'
t
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 even aware about the positive effects of
education
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 and the job prospects.They were made to do farming, which was the only source of income at that time.Agricultural practices were carried out in the areas where
education
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 did not
gain
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 much prevalence due to lack of awareness. I would like to conclude my essay by stating that
education
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 is the only means by which individuals can
gain
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 acceptance in the society.
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 makes them self reliant and independent in many areas.While
on the other hand
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 an uneducated person will always have negative thoughts and an never
gain
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 independence economically.
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