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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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The
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 of
technology
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 help people to contact with each other easier, they can communicate with others only using a single touch.
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,
technology
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 may help our life easier, it's
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 driven us to develop bad behaviour. So, what are the problems that come up with the
technology
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development
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 nowadays? Some of these problems known as "social addiction", the word for someone who get addicted to the social networks.
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, these people cannot live without their phone, they start to feel anxiety and worried whenever they have not gotten in touch with the social world.
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, the one who checks their phone whenever they eat, work or even in a middle of the meeting, these people tend to be social addicts.
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 behaviour is the main reason why people have less interaction in the real world.
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, our problems from the
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 are not only the social addiction, but
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 the "social bullying". Since, people can express either their feelings or their criticize in social networks anonymously, they do not have to worried to be hated in the real world because no one really knows who them. In other word, people can say everything they think either positive or negative comments in social networks without considering the one who receives
their
objective case of they
them
 hate comments. Many people who get social bullying end up depressed, losing self-confidence and some even commit a suicide. Conclusion,
technology
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 and social networks can be both positive and negative
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development but
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developments, but
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, according to how we use it, in these days negative
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 is overwhelming the positive. I hope that in the near future people will be more aware with these bad behaviour and try to resolve it together, so that we can use the
technology
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 in a better way and cause no problem to each other.
Submitted by Mharnsingh on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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