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Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that by some individuals that the government should impose strict rules on sound limits. While others think that it is a social right to do whatever they want to do in their life.
Although
 listening
music
 relaxes people’s mind, in my opinion, it should be in control.
To begin
 with, high
noise
 creates many problems.
First
 and foremost problem is that high
noise
 creates problems for people to concentrate on their work.
For example
, in the university, students may not able to do study carefully, if their neighbours keep singing too loudly. It creates a barrier in mind to connect with their ideas.
Secondly
, it is
also
 detrimental to people's health, as listening
music
 on the high notes continuously diminish the ability to hear the low voice and cause hearing loss and damage cells and membrane in the cochlea.
For example
, all hospitals restricted Hockings in their surrounded area to prevent patients from dangerous.
On the other hand
 side,
although
 listening to
music
 is everyone’s rights to get rid of their stress, but over limit of anything has proven deleterious for the people,
therefore
 people should follow the rules which are made by the government to save the people from heath issues. One of the main reason is that, the high
noise
also
 causes
noise
 pollution, which is not only harmful for humans, but
also
 for animals and bird species, as the results it leads to disappear the existence of these living creatures.
For example
, most of the living creatures do not like to live in the city areas, where the
noise
 intensity always high. In conclusion-
although
 everyone has rights to use
music
 for the recreational purpose,
noise
 pollution creates several problems which can cause health issues disturbance
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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