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More and more people are opting for readymade ford intead of freshly home cooked food. Discuss advantageous and disadvantages?

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Nowadays, most of the young people are showing interest for online
food
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 items Rather
then
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 fresh home made
food
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.
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 is because of their busy schedule and lack of time for preparing
food
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. In these scenarios, we have both pro's and cons, which we will discuss in
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 essay.
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, not only young people, many IT people are
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 opting for ready-made
food
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. Because, most of the people will live away from home, so, they have left with no other option
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 of ordering
food
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 online. In my opinion, I would advise youngsters to prepare their
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 at home
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 of ordering online. Because, not all restaurants will maintain the quality of the
food
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. There are many online
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 party platforms, which are linked to restaurants to delivery
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 on-line. For these types of delivery, we cannot guarantee the same
food
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 we ordered at the same time the quality as well.
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, street
food
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 is the booming business in which 50% of teenage women are attracted to it.
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, there is
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food
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a food
the food
 called
pani
a symptom of some physical hurt or disorder
pain
panic
pane
puri
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Puri
 which is quite famous street eating
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 in India, but the quality of the water they serve is ridiculous which in fact gives us many health issues. On the whole, the only one advantage of these ready-made
food
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 is we can save time. Rest other is all disadvantages only. It will damage our health system and will lead to many heart and cancer diseases.
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