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Parents should be held legally responsible for their children’s acts. What is your opinion? Support it with personal examples.

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Kids always learn
first
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 at home by their parents and
then
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 from society, one of the studies says that little one notice their parents and elders at home and try to do the same or adopt it.
For instance
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, if an elder sibling is forcing parents for personal car so later on when a kid comes to same age demands and try to push parents in that way. Parents need to act and behave as they want reflect same in their
off spring
the immediate descendants of a person
offspring
. Once they grow up its hard to change their habits as they learn at home by seeing their mother & father or elder siblings doing that in a particular way. One of friend and his wife usually argue or fight
on
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for
about
 silly things, children notice that and they do same when they are at their age and it’s too late to change their mindset. One of father's
friend
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friends
 got married in cross religion and in our culture
this
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 not common or seems prohibited in some parts of the state. Later their children fall in love with someone cross the border in different religion
this
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 was hard for them to accept it. Parents can't argue
on
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about
with
for
 it as they were the
first
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 to start and later little one adopt it somehow. Parents are responsible for the kid’s act, it may be learnt from them or
society but
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society, but
 they are the best teachers of their offspring to teach them what's right and wrong in
this
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 world. They have
t
in the direction of
to
 monitor and teach children in a way that in future, both
mother
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mothers
 & father can accept children act with a positive
mind set
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mindset
.
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