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Online, people write product reviews and opinions about services. Is it a good thing or bad thing?

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With the development of technology, the use of the
internet
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 to purchase items and services has become more common among people. People like to share their
experience
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experiences
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 and observations on these products with the world. In my opinion, I believe that
this
 is a positive advancement as consumers are able to get an idea of the
product
 they are purchasing. In
this
 essay, I will be discussing why writing
reviews
 is a good trend.
Firstly
,
customers
 who have already purchased the
product
 are able to share their personal opinions on it. They can share whether the item is of good
quality
 and provide information on the reliability of the
product
 as to whether it is sold as advertised. Certain organisations like to falsely advertise the goods they sell to get more business,
therefore
, with personal feedback from other consumers on reliability, future
customers
 can save money if the
product
 has been falsely advertised.
In addition
, these
reviews
 give buyers the opportunity to make a choice on whether to buy these items online or go to a physical store.
For example
, reading
reviews
 on
purchase
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 of clothes is useful as some purchasers might have issues with the sizing and it would be better for them to go to a physical store to try on the clothes.
Furthermore
, bad
reviews
 on products and services act as a deterrent for
customers
 to spend on goods that are of poor
quality
. Some people may have the impression that the item they want to buy is of good
quality
due to
 the influence of social media
,
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 when in reality the
product
 is not up to standards. Personal feedback from former
customers
 helps
customers
 save money by preventing unnecessary purchases. In conclusion,
reviews
 on products and services are beneficial to new
customers
 as
it
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they
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provides
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provide
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 feedback on the reliability and
quality
 of the
product
, which helps
customers
 make a choice and save money where they can.
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Enhance the essay by providing a more detailed conclusion. Summarize the key points succinctly and reflect on the broader implications.
coherence cohesion
Incorporate a few more linking phrases or transition words to improve the flow between ideas and paragraphs even further.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction is presented, which outlines the main point of the essay effectively.
task achievement
The essay provides relevant and specific examples to illustrate points, such as the mention of clothing purchases and sizing.
coherence cohesion
Main points are well-supported with reasons and explanations, indicating a good understanding of the topic.

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