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Nowadays more and more people are spending less time at home. Why do you think it happens? What effect does this have on individuals and the society?

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Today, people are hardly spending time at their houses. The main cause behind it is extreme pressure of office work which is leading to some serious problems like deterioration of family relations, increased
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 and depression. In
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 fast moving world owing to busy work schedules people do not spend sufficient time in their homes. People often fail to keep balance between professional and personal life, resulting in to not give proper space to their families. In
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 hurry of earning better for our family, we forgot to spend time with them only. Due to haste deadlines of assignment submissions and work load people end up staying in the office till late hours.
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, today with compared
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 decade, there has been a sudden rise in the hours that an employer spend in office.
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 affects a person's relation to their family and
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 increasing the level of
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. Due to, not staying up at home person starts going away from his family and
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 in the long term leads to fight among elders, making a bad impression and serving a wrong example in front of their children.
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, the
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 rises up, which in worst situation results in the divorce between parents or breakdown of the family.
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, encourages a person towards some harmful addicts like smoking, alcohol; to kill their
stress
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. To include, I have seen many families where the father hardly remembers the grade or even age of his kids. To summarize, increased pressure of one's professional needs results in his absence from his house, which adversely affects his personal relations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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