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The time people devote in job leaves very little time for personal life. How widespread is the problem? What problem will this shortage of time cause?

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People spending more
time
 at work than their personal life has become more and more popular over the world.
Therefore
,
this
 has led to various problems
such
 as physical damage and mental health. In
this
 essay, I shall discuss these problems and explore a possible solution. The problem of shortage of personal
time
 is mainly caused by ambitious for earning money. In a result, people have suffered serious physical problems.
For example
, young people hamper to enjoy life for exercise, eating, sleeping and dating.
This
 is leading to an instance problem
such
 as diabetes, high blood pressure. It's about the
time
 of
this
 issue of goal achievement is addressed by people who want to get want promotion in jobs by their boss and the more they focus in a job the more stress they feel.
This
 pressure effect on peoples' mental health
such
 as anxiety, agitation, agony. As a solution to
this
, learning how to work efficiency is better than using more
time
 at work. It is very important that along with managing the
time
 and balance it. In conclusion,
such
 conscious and collective steps can help people effectively spending
time
 for a personal life and at the same
time
 cut the problems of physical damage and mental problem.
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