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Workers in Korea have too many rights and it affects a company’s efficiency. Do you agree or disagree with this idea, giving examples.

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It is considered that the Korean employees have a more explicit labour rights to the detriment of their employing companies. In my opinion, I disagree with
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 statement and consider it rather more beneficial to both companies and their workers. One of the most important benefits that stems from having a flexible workers' rights is motivation. Since the incentives like paid holidays, opportunities for career development and bonuses help in keeping the workers motivated, they
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 day and night that results in bringing a lot of financial rewards for the employing firm.
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, a recent survey of the Asian
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 market has revealed that those companies who offer greater benefits to its employees, make huge businesses and a motivated
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work force
the force of workers available
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 is found to be the most obvious underlying reason for
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 motivating employees these incentives make a friendlier working environment that increases the company in its ratings amongst the
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 seekers. Team building and better
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 efficiency are another reason that helps workers to give their best performances, if given rights.
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, conditions like long
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 hours and hiking
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 pressures not only cause
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 exhaustion amongst the employees but
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 affect their mutual coordination.
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 in turn brings only frustration with lesser efficiency and disturbed minds.
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, people prefer to seek
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 in multinational companies because they have a more flexible working laws and better career progression as compared to local companies.
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 it bolsters the view that labour rights are for the benefit of both employers and employees. To conclude, I strongly believe that exercising flexible labour laws and offering generous rights to the employees is the key to success.
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 environment, team building and efficiency.
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