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The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. To what extent do you agree?

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In the modern world, most of the people are performing various jobs at a time to satisfy their financial needs and continue their
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 studies throughout their
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 as single employment is now becoming outdated to survive in
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 world. I completely agree with
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 statement which can be characterised by following paragraphs. To start with, In the past, people used to choose a single career option and after they acquired a relevant job they discontinued with more
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 and spent their whole
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 with less money and resources.
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, if an individual wants to live a luxurious
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 and bear all expenses,
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 that person has to do more than one task and complete his
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. To exemplify, some of the workers are doing
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 studies and part time job to succeed in the
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.
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, there are so much expense of each person and their family as to complete basic needs like school fees, rent etc. Are becoming very costly,
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, they have to find different methods to earn more money.
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,
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education
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 will help them to assist their children in academic and non academic studies. Along with
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, they will get the opportunities in several careers and chance in promotion
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, an employee having more
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 will definitely give higher pay scale and promotion easily.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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