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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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With the advancement in technology, people either feel excited or worried about the impact of artificial intelligence on people. While the opposing views are understandable, I am optimistic about the development of artificial machines. On the one hand, the use of these machines could lead to increasing crime rates and financial burden.
Firstly
, the direct impact of artificial intelligence is linked to higher unemployment rate as robots can work more accurately and efficiently than men do.
That is
 to say, more people would be unemployed. To support the entire family or themselves, these people,
for instance
, would engage in smuggling or end up being frauds, which would lead to increase in crime.
Furthermore
, these machines are often sophisticated, and they require specialist services. To maintain and upgrade the machines, the fee would be costly.
On the other hand
, I believe artificial machines could be beneficial to people and society as a whole. As stated above, the intelligent machines lead to higher productivity and
reduction
Suggestion
a reduction
 in the
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 cost, which cuts down the price of items. Apart from that, artificial intelligence decreases the errors made by researchers as it can handle and calculate a huge amount of data with accuracy, and
this
 could lead to a more reliable result.
Finally
, these machines could contribute to medical breakthrough or even reduce the pace of global warming.
For example
, engineers are working on a machine that aims to remove extra carbon dioxide from the atmosphere. In conclusion, it seems to me that the positive outcomes of the intelligent technology outweigh the negative ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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